Dave and Dude

Dave and Dude · 05:39 AM

(this is my first movie! )

Karnester · 01-31-2019, 04:02 AM

Video is coming soon!

Dustin Guest · 01-31-2019, 05:22 AM

The narrative was kinda all over the place, but I give you credit for putting in the effort. For a first movie, it's not bad. Keep at it!

Karnester · 01-31-2019, 05:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dustin Guest

The narrative was kinda all over the place, but I give you credit for putting in the effort. For a first movie, it's not bad. Keep at it!

Thanks!

Jt Copper · 01-31-2019, 06:57 PM

Hahaha, this is amazing! I love it, and for all the wrong reasons.

Echoing what Dustin said, this was good for a first movie. The effort is there, and it appears you were actually trying to make an original piece. It needs a ton of work in the animating department, but this movie proves a competency in knowing how to do it by hand. I do notice that drag the characters around a lot by the actions they're doing, rather then moving them manually. Doing this with actions like run and fall are fine, but get used to moving them with the drag tool, rather then hold the mouse down and dragging the character around while they perform their actions.

A good way to improve is to download the movies here in the forum, and just pull them apart (and I mean by watching them based on their rating. Go into the movies section and click the ratings button twice, start from there. Don't just download the more recent stuff like PatryKkorna and Thomas Saunders). Dissect the scenes and see how they move things around. At a starting animating level, I seriously recommend watching the movies made by Theflyingcar, in a sense that he's accomplishing a lot with the little amount that he is animating, making it easy to understand what he did to make those movies look good.

I also agree with Dustin that the story is all over the place. All I got from it was this one guy wants to beat up the other guy, because I guess the other guy ran over the one guy's dad with a car, and even then it wasn't always consistent with that. Pacing was really bad throughout and felt like it dragged on. Fade to black/white is very situational, and is not always recommended, use cut to black. That being said, I really enjoyed your placement in the old MIDI music files, some of the sounds and movements were unorthodox enough to get me to chuckled, and I laughed at the strong guy delivering his late dad's favorite chainsaw to his gravestone, which I don't think was supposed to be funny, but I still found the moment amusing. Thinking about it though, I am not sure if this is totally your fault. I am assuming you're young, like 12 or something, so I don't expect you to make the next Vlarion or NUTS series, not right now at least.

Keep up the work though, good job!

Karnester · 01-31-2019, 07:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jt Copper

Hahaha, this is amazing! I love it, and for all the wrong reasons.

Echoing what Dustin said, this was good for a first movie. The effort is there, and it appears you were actually trying to make an original piece. It needs a ton of work in the animating department, but this movie proves a competency in knowing how to do it by hand. I do notice that drag the...

Wow, thank you! I plan to improve with each movie I create

Old Rivers · 02-02-2019, 04:56 AM

This was okay. Shows promise anyway.

I chuckled at the tear drop and at RIP DAD. Also clever way to make the graves - I laughed out loud when I went in to the program and discovered what they actually were.

Good job!

Karnester · 02-02-2019, 11:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Old Rivers

This was okay. Shows promise anyway.

I chuckled at the tear drop and at RIP DAD. Also clever way to make the graves - I laughed out loud when I went in to the program and discovered what they actually were.

Good job!

Thank you!
I hope Sony won't sue me

Jt Copper · 02-03-2019, 06:08 PM

Okay now I got curious and checked. That is amazing and clever and I bumped my rating up just because of that.

One whole extra point. FROM ME.

Karnester · 02-03-2019, 09:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jt Copper

Okay now I got curious and checked. That is amazing and clever and I bumped my rating up just because of that.

One whole extra point. FROM ME.

lol thanks

Zakarithreedee · 04-09-2019, 10:54 PM

........ Starring Takeshi "Jaian" Goda as Dave!
while i agree this is a good first movie in all respects why did you use jaian's voice for this

01-31-2019, 04:02 AM	#2
Karnester Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2019 Posts: 34	Video is coming soon!
Karnester Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2019 Posts: 34	. . . . . . . . . . . . . .Why not?. . . . . . . . . . . . . .

01-31-2019, 06:57 PM	#5
Jt Copper Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 3,463	Hahaha, this is amazing! I love it, and for all the wrong reasons. Echoing what Dustin said, this was good for a first movie. The effort is there, and it appears you were actually trying to make an original piece. It needs a ton of work in the animating department, but this movie proves a competency in knowing how to do it by hand. I do notice that drag the characters around a lot by the actions they're doing, rather then moving them manually. Doing this with actions like run and fall are fine, but get used to moving them with the drag tool, rather then hold the mouse down and dragging the character around while they perform their actions. A good way to improve is to download the movies here in the forum, and just pull them apart (and I mean by watching them based on their rating. Go into the movies section and click the ratings button twice, start from there. Don't just download the more recent stuff like PatryKkorna and Thomas Saunders). Dissect the scenes and see how they move things around. At a starting animating level, I seriously recommend watching the movies made by Theflyingcar, in a sense that he's accomplishing a lot with the little amount that he is animating, making it easy to understand what he did to make those movies look good. I also agree with Dustin that the story is all over the place. All I got from it was this one guy wants to beat up the other guy, because I guess the other guy ran over the one guy's dad with a car, and even then it wasn't always consistent with that. Pacing was really bad throughout and felt like it dragged on. Fade to black/white is very situational, and is not always recommended, use cut to black. That being said, I really enjoyed your placement in the old MIDI music files, some of the sounds and movements were unorthodox enough to get me to chuckled, and I laughed at the strong guy delivering his late dad's favorite chainsaw to his gravestone, which I don't think was supposed to be funny, but I still found the moment amusing. Thinking about it though, I am not sure if this is totally your fault. I am assuming you're young, like 12 or something, so I don't expect you to make the next Vlarion or NUTS series, not right now at least. Keep up the work though, good job!
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Jt Copper Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 3,463	Okay now I got curious and checked. That is amazing and clever and I bumped my rating up just because of that. One whole extra point. FROM ME.
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01-31-2019, 05:22 AM	#3
Dustin Guest Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 4,420	The narrative was kinda all over the place, but I give you credit for putting in the effort. For a first movie, it's not bad. Keep at it!

02-02-2019, 04:56 AM	#7
Old Rivers Super Moderator Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 6,985	This was okay. Shows promise anyway. I chuckled at the tear drop and at RIP DAD. Also clever way to make the graves - I laughed out loud when I went in to the program and discovered what they actually were. Good job!

04-09-2019, 10:54 PM	#11
Zakarithreedee Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2016 Posts: 62	........ Starring Takeshi "Jaian" Goda as Dave! while i agree this is a good first movie in all respects why did you use jaian's voice for this