Suspense

Suspense · 05:15 PM

I made this movie last week, and waited on the voices, I think the voice acting is amazing in this. Thanks for checking out the thread and I hope everyone enjoys.

I have been informed that on XP computers, the talking actions go on 2-3 seconds longer for the actors because my computer is a slow piece of shit. I apologize for this.

Aaron Haynes · 03-04-2006, 04:57 PM

That screenshot looks incredible.

Downloading, I'm working in Maya atm but I'll check it out pretty soon and leave comments.

Demented Ferret · 03-04-2006, 05:22 PM

That was really great, stranglely relevant bar the wholy dying bit. And yeah, the sync is way out on XP - but it doesn't really hurt the movie at all. As I said - nice movie, I like it.

Warren Wagner · 03-04-2006, 05:27 PM

Thanks man. I find it relevant to my own life as well and I too, am not dying...I think I think this is my favorite short since "Totalitarian Blueberry" because the last few shorts I did, kinda lacked.

Salter · 03-04-2006, 06:04 PM

Downloading this, I'll check it out soon!

The Chinese Jew · 03-04-2006, 07:04 PM

Nice!! I'm excited to see this! Downloading.......

Ben Rice · 03-04-2006, 08:15 PM

That was pretty good, Warren.

The Chinese Jew · 03-04-2006, 08:58 PM

Someone please upload a god damn zip file!

Breed · 03-04-2006, 09:15 PM

I liked this, and yeah it is better than your past few (which were still good anyway)

YUP

Richard Bevis · 03-04-2006, 09:32 PM

I like your films, and the topics are always interesting, but the same camera angles repeated like 20 times kinda bug me.

Salter · 03-05-2006, 01:46 AM

This turned out really well. The syncronization thing is a bit annoying at times, but once you can look past it, it works very well. Good work here.

Mousenator · 03-05-2006, 02:36 AM

Despite the awful syncronization problem, I liked this movie.

2006 is off to a great start!

Oh, and the voice acting was excellent.

Evil Ash · 03-05-2006, 02:53 AM

For the short time it was made in, it was decent.

Quite frankly this would have been better as a radio show. The visuals and camera angles do almost nothing for the dialogue, besides the random times when they happen to work - but the fact that the same angle was used half a dozen times before when it didn't fit with what was a being said, well... yeah.

And I'm not sure how it played out when it's properly synched, but I felt that the synch issue damaged the dialogue. There's more to dialogue than the lines, when nothing is said is sometimes more important than when something is said - or the timing of when one person says another. So an angry line, a pause, and then another angry line just felt wrong. They should be almost cutting eachother off during those slightly heated moments, or something. But yeah this is 100% not your fault, I just felt like stating that.

But seriously, it felt sloppily... edited together. Like you made a bunch of scenes, and then randomly slapped them down for certain parts of the dialogue. Camera angles should have some relevance to the line/actions. Like I said, sometimes it worked, but it felt like they worked purely based on the luck of the draw.

Good dialogue though, good acting. I enjoyed the story, just not the presentation. I think you should have spent more time on it, you could have made it a lot more emotional.

Great radio show, but a below average film.

The Chinese Jew · 03-05-2006, 07:53 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by The Chinese Jew

Someone please upload a god damn zip file!

yep.

Salter · 03-05-2006, 08:06 AM

http://www.psychoholiday.com/uploade...4/Suspense.zip

Salter · 03-06-2006, 12:18 AM

Whoa! Don't get lost in the legacy releases!

Aaron Haynes · 03-06-2006, 02:52 AM

Stickied.

Dustin Guest · 03-07-2006, 09:08 PM

It's not a bad movie at all. But the voice over work was pretty weak. That was my only gripe. Well...that and the over-use of the sarcastic laugh.

Shootfast · 03-08-2006, 09:05 AM

I greatly enjoyed this script and voice acting as I always do with Warren's work. Another great job! However, to strengthen the overall feel of your films perhaps you should submit them to test viewers? At only a few minutes a piece, and with such high quality scripts, I'm sure many people (myself included) would love to give some constructive critisism where it could help.

75%! (Great, well written script. However, as mentioned above, repetetive scenes, synching problems and what I felt was a little lack of detail to the scenes gives me that overall score)

Molotov · 03-08-2006, 05:14 PM

That was quite nice. I don't particularly think it's great, but considering the time it took to make that's not too bad. The cigarettes were nice touches, but even though it wasn't meant to be very action-packed, I did get a little bored just watching people talk.

Stefan · 03-09-2006, 01:29 AM

I enjoyed it. Jon and Shannon did below average jobs compared to what they have done. The lack-off syncing didn't harm the movie too much, just enough to be annoying. You also made good use of v3dmm. I liked how you were scratching your head at a lot of said things, but by the end you get it all. Becasue of this I doubt I'll watch it again.

80%

Gazbo · 03-11-2006, 04:09 AM

It's good to see some people know how to properely format their scripts.

Moviemagic or Final Draft?

Gazbo · 03-11-2006, 04:12 AM

Why do people feel the need to animate in wide screen? 3dmm is already set to 16:9, what's wrong with that?

And calling it Indie Films...sorry, it's all a bit pretentious to me.

Jesterfoot · 03-11-2006, 04:26 AM

awesome script and acting, but this movie as a whole could have been better.

6.5/10

Warren Wagner · 03-11-2006, 04:50 AM

Gazbo,

First off I use Final Draft. I think it is a very good program.

About indie 3dmm. It is an idea Sergon and I had put together where as the movie will focus on subject matter and characters rather then flashy animation. We wanted to make a lable for movies that try to go outside of the box. The name was Sergon's idea and we both agreed it worked very well.

As for the widescreen...I just like it.

03-04-2006, 06:04 PM	#5
Salter Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 1,958	Downloading this, I'll check it out soon!
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03-04-2006, 08:15 PM	#7
Ben Rice Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 10,220	That was pretty good, Warren.
Ben Rice Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 10,220

03-04-2006, 09:15 PM	#9
Breed Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Posts: 7,768	I liked this, and yeah it is better than your past few (which were still good anyway) YUP
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03-05-2006, 01:46 AM	#11
Salter Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 1,958	This turned out really well. The syncronization thing is a bit annoying at times, but once you can look past it, it works very well. Good work here.
Salter Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 1,958

03-05-2006, 02:36 AM	#12
Mousenator Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Posts: 474	Despite the awful syncronization problem, I liked this movie. 2006 is off to a great start! Oh, and the voice acting was excellent.
Mousenator Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Posts: 474

03-04-2006, 04:57 PM	#2
Aaron Haynes Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 15,125	That screenshot looks incredible. Downloading, I'm working in Maya atm but I'll check it out pretty soon and leave comments.

03-04-2006, 05:22 PM	#3
Demented Ferret Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 16,248	That was really great, stranglely relevant bar the wholy dying bit. And yeah, the sync is way out on XP - but it doesn't really hurt the movie at all. As I said - nice movie, I like it.

03-04-2006, 05:27 PM	#4
Warren Wagner Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2002 Posts: 1,747	Thanks man. I find it relevant to my own life as well and I too, am not dying...I think I think this is my favorite short since "Totalitarian Blueberry" because the last few shorts I did, kinda lacked.

03-04-2006, 07:04 PM	#6
The Chinese Jew Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 14,225	Nice!! I'm excited to see this! Downloading.......

03-04-2006, 08:58 PM	#8
The Chinese Jew Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 14,225	Someone please upload a god damn zip file!

03-04-2006, 09:32 PM	#10
Richard Bevis Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 2,190	I like your films, and the topics are always interesting, but the same camera angles repeated like 20 times kinda bug me.

03-05-2006, 02:53 AM	#13
Evil Ash Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 15,534	For the short time it was made in, it was decent. Quite frankly this would have been better as a radio show. The visuals and camera angles do almost nothing for the dialogue, besides the random times when they happen to work - but the fact that the same angle was used half a dozen times before when it didn't fit with what was a being said, well... yeah. And I'm not sure how it played out when it's properly synched, but I felt that the synch issue damaged the dialogue. There's more to dialogue than the lines, when nothing is said is sometimes more important than when something is said - or the timing of when one person says another. So an angry line, a pause, and then another angry line just felt wrong. They should be almost cutting eachother off during those slightly heated moments, or something. But yeah this is 100% not your fault, I just felt like stating that. But seriously, it felt sloppily... edited together. Like you made a bunch of scenes, and then randomly slapped them down for certain parts of the dialogue. Camera angles should have some relevance to the line/actions. Like I said, sometimes it worked, but it felt like they worked purely based on the luck of the draw. Good dialogue though, good acting. I enjoyed the story, just not the presentation. I think you should have spent more time on it, you could have made it a lot more emotional. Great radio show, but a below average film.
Evil Ash Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 15,534

03-05-2006, 08:06 AM	#15
Salter Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 1,958	http://www.psychoholiday.com/uploade...4/Suspense.zip
Salter Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 1,958

03-06-2006, 12:18 AM	#16
Salter Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 1,958	Whoa! Don't get lost in the legacy releases!
Salter Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Posts: 1,958

03-06-2006, 02:52 AM	#17
Aaron Haynes Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 15,125	Stickied.

03-07-2006, 09:08 PM	#18
Dustin Guest Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 4,420	It's not a bad movie at all. But the voice over work was pretty weak. That was my only gripe. Well...that and the over-use of the sarcastic laugh.

03-08-2006, 09:05 AM	#19
Shootfast Member Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 715	I greatly enjoyed this script and voice acting as I always do with Warren's work. Another great job! However, to strengthen the overall feel of your films perhaps you should submit them to test viewers? At only a few minutes a piece, and with such high quality scripts, I'm sure many people (myself included) would love to give some constructive critisism where it could help. 75%! (Great, well written script. However, as mentioned above, repetetive scenes, synching problems and what I felt was a little lack of detail to the scenes gives me that overall score)
Shootfast Member Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 715

03-08-2006, 05:14 PM	#20
Molotov Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 4,858	That was quite nice. I don't particularly think it's great, but considering the time it took to make that's not too bad. The cigarettes were nice touches, but even though it wasn't meant to be very action-packed, I did get a little bored just watching people talk.
Molotov Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 4,858

03-09-2006, 01:29 AM	#21
Stefan Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2002 Posts: 1,190	I enjoyed it. Jon and Shannon did below average jobs compared to what they have done. The lack-off syncing didn't harm the movie too much, just enough to be annoying. You also made good use of v3dmm. I liked how you were scratching your head at a lot of said things, but by the end you get it all. Becasue of this I doubt I'll watch it again. 80%
Stefan Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2002 Posts: 1,190

03-11-2006, 04:09 AM	#22
Gazbo Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2001 Posts: 66	It's good to see some people know how to properely format their scripts. Moviemagic or Final Draft?
Gazbo Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2001 Posts: 66

03-11-2006, 04:12 AM	#23
Gazbo Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2001 Posts: 66	Why do people feel the need to animate in wide screen? 3dmm is already set to 16:9, what's wrong with that? And calling it Indie Films...sorry, it's all a bit pretentious to me.
Gazbo Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2001 Posts: 66

03-11-2006, 04:26 AM	#24
Jesterfoot Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 7,470	awesome script and acting, but this movie as a whole could have been better. 6.5/10

03-11-2006, 04:50 AM	#25
Warren Wagner Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2002 Posts: 1,747	Gazbo, First off I use Final Draft. I think it is a very good program. About indie 3dmm. It is an idea Sergon and I had put together where as the movie will focus on subject matter and characters rather then flashy animation. We wanted to make a lable for movies that try to go outside of the box. The name was Sergon's idea and we both agreed it worked very well. As for the widescreen...I just like it.